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Lunash's Crash on MC (New MC Story) This is the New MC story or Lunash's Crash

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Posted 01 June 2010 - 05:35 PM

Thank you all for helping me make this story come to life. Without your help, this story might not have been able to come out onto the digital paper on my MS Word doc.

The story tells of how Lunash crashed (accidentally) on MC. Ringobingo escaped the ship, and is starting to try to take over the world.

And now, a word from my Doc:

Authors note: This story is about the crash landing of Lunash, Ringobingo, and Lunash’s crew on the world (planet) of MYSTcommunity. Thank you LThyme and Gehn Lord of Ages (GLOA), and many others for the use of their names in the story.

And now the story:

The Crash of Lunash and the Finding of MYSTcommunity






“Sir! We are approaching an unknown planet! What do you want us to do?”

“Take us down, and land,” Lunash said. “I want to see if there are any inhabitants.”

“Yes sir!”

This is the things that were said when Lunash was approaching the Planet of MC. Little did they know that their landing gear was fried until they tried to touch down.

“Sir, our landing gear is malfunctioning! We are going to crash!”

“Pull us up! Pull us up!” Lunash yelled at this crew.

“We can’t! We're too low!”

“All stations prepare for impact!” Lunash told the entire crew on his ship.

The ship crashes, and all power is lost. Lunash and his crew are unconscious. Ringobingo the prisoner, is the only person who is still awake. He leaves the ship to explore the new world, and is lost for a year.


This is the beginning part of the Story. The Author (that's me!) becomes a character in the story. I try to use a technique that GLOA used in his MC comics, and have the characters know that I am there, and talk to me while the story is going on. I make a few appearances later on, when we find out where Ringobingo has gone. Sorry in advance to Camoudile, as Ringobingo decided to... Well, wait until that part becomes available. I promise that none of this story contains anything that even gives a reference to something that you would find in the Adult Writings section.

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Posted 01 June 2010 - 06:11 PM

It begins...
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Posted 02 June 2010 - 10:50 AM

Ah, the begining ^^ Actually reminds me of Nathalie Sarraute's style :)
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Posted 02 June 2010 - 09:40 PM

Thanks for the comments guys! Just want to ask this question before I give more thought (and believe me, I don't want to be thinking about this one anymore... Been thinking about it for the past two days...) Does anyone not like the Hello (w/out the "O") word? 'Cause if someone does, I need to know, before I post the next part of the Crash. I only need a "Yes" or "No" answer. *Raises voice* And I am talking to all of MC about this one! *Lowers voice* I really don't want to get in trouble because of a silly word like that.

Reason why I am asking is because Ringobingo says it a lot, along with his swearing words (F***, S***, etc)...

*Animusic plays in the background.* Grr... Whomever gave the link to that first Animusic video, got me hooked on Animusic... Not a bad thing either... Been looking for something new...

Anywho, the next part of the Crash will be uploaded on Friday. Jolarin (my dad), has a meeting to go to. (He is a nurse, so that is what the meeting is about (taking care of people etc...))

May the Grower guide you! And may the story turn out as well as it did (and does) in my head.

-Lunash, Captain of Maglev
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Posted 03 June 2010 - 01:27 AM

hmm maybe you should "beep" the guy as in "What the *beep*" that would be according to the forum guidelines(think so) and everyone will still understand the idea.
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Posted 03 June 2010 - 08:46 AM

Alright, thanks Luna. That is what I was planning on doing, but then I started writing, and ended up writing the word out, but blanked the other swear words out. So used to hearing that word that I don't give it any notice on my "Swear word list"...

Right, well I'm going to go ahead and post the story now. Moving the wait time down a day.

Here is the next part of the story. It takes place just after the first part. (Read it like you just read the first part)

*A few days later:*

“Uhh… What happened?” Lunash groans.

“We… We survived? How?”

“Computer! Damage report!” Lunash says into the computer’s mic.

“The entire ship is damaged to a point where it can’t fix itself. All engines are currently leaking fluids. The warp drive is currently laying a few yards away from the ship, and it is still active.” The computer garbles something then says:

“Computer memory core number 1000 trillion is missing. Trying to find cause.” The computer pauses for a moment, then says, “Cause found. Ringobingo the Headhunter took the core.”

“Computer, is Ringobingo still on ship?”

“Negative. It appears that he left the ship a few days ago. Scanning region with back-up scanners. Scan complete. No sign of Ringobingo. He is gone.”

“That… That TROLL!!! That stupid TROLL!!! I knew that I shouldn’t have accepted that mission of escorting him to a prison planet.”

“But sir, if we didn’t do it, then we wouldn’t have gotten the supplies we needed. And we wouldn’t have had the experience to get us out of hairy situations that you, sir, couldn’t get us out of. Remember Stardate # 12092? We wouldn't have been able to get out of that situation if it weren’t for Ringobingo.”

“That’s true. Wait, situations that I couldn’t have gotten us out of? If I remember correctly, I was the one who decided to bring Ringobingo on the bridge. Not you.”

“Yes, sorry sir.”

“Now to figure out what this planet is, and who lives on it, and where Ringobingo went for shelter.” Lunash said, more to himself than to the crew.

Then he said to the computer, “Computer is engineer Scotty still alive?”

“Engineer Scotty’s vital signs are stable. He is alive, and down in the engineering room. He is currently conscious.”

“Thank you computer.” Turning to the intercom, he pushed the button to the engineering deck, and told Scotty to get up to the bridge. “Yes sir!” Scotty replied.


And that's the second part.

Hopefully Scotty (I couldn't figure out a name for him) will be able to help Lunash with the Ringobingo problem.

Have fun, and good luck!

-Lunash
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Posted 03 June 2010 - 10:42 AM

"Och, Ca'en, sair, th' crash din mangled me engines! Ah kinna promise ahnnathin', bu' Ah'll try ta fin' t'at Troll Ringobingo, but Ah kinna change th' lahws of physics!"

-Engineer Scotty
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Posted 03 June 2010 - 10:55 AM

Ahh yes...

Also, I need a paint job on the MC 'Mechs. Anyone willing to try to make one up? Need one for the Admin, the Team Members and the Members. It can be the same color (colour) if you want, but I need a symbol or something to be able to distinguish between the different Members.

Also (again), in the next- next part, there will be a scene with Ringobingo, Camoudile, Mystress and a few others. Be Warned! Ringobingo swears!

May the Grower guide you.

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Posted 05 June 2010 - 07:35 PM

Here is the next part of the story. We join Lunash and Scotty on Maglev, talking about the "Problem" and how to solve it. Then they have a surprise guest...

*A few minutes later*


“Sir, you called?” Scotty asked Lunash.

“Yes, Scotty. Walk with me please.” They started walking, in complete silence.

Lunash finally breaks the silence by saying, “Scotty, I know that you have many things to do now, since we crashed on this new planet. However we need to get Ringobingo back from where ever he went to.” Turning towards Scotty, Lunash puts a paw on his left shoulder and looks deep into his eyes. “I know that you are up to your ears in work for the ship, however I need you to get the sensors up and running, so that way we can find Ringobingo before it is too late.”

Looking back into Lunash’s eyes, Scotty started to get tears into his eyes. He suddenly broke his gaze from Lunash to look at me. “Who is that?” Scotty asked, pointing towards me.

Looking over his shoulder, Lunash sighed and said, “That is the Author of this story Scotty. If you look around, you can see the text flowing. He is the person who is allowing this text to flow from my mouth. And for some reason, he has decided to visit us.” Turning towards me, Lunash said, “What do you want, Author?”

Sorry. Just checking to see how you are doing. And to see if I need to heal any wounds.

“Everything is fine. Go and do your Authoring somewhere else.”

Fine. I will come back in a year’s time. By then, Ringobingo should be found. If I am writing this right, that is.

“You make no sense, love. But whatever.”

Turning back towards Scotty, Lunash finds him having his jaw near his knees.

“I—I—I don’t understand. I am so confused!” Scotty’s eyes roll back into his head, and he passes out.

“Shoot! See what you did, Author?” Lunash said, turning back to me. However once he looked back at the place where I was, I was gone.

“Blast it all.” Picking Scotty up, and putting him over his shoulder, Lunash headed to Sick Bay. Once there, Scotty had woken up just enough to say, “I—I will do it, Captain.”

Happy reading!

Also, how is everyone liking the story so far?

Please leave many, many comments. I love to hear back from the readers.

-Lunash
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Posted 13 June 2010 - 08:47 PM

Only the third update, and the fourth wall is already irrevocably smashed.
Sir, I salute you. :)
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Posted 13 June 2010 - 09:34 PM

Yes, well... Thanks for the comment. And I salute you back.

Please know that I have nothing against Camoudile, however he gets injured in this next part of the Crash.

And speaking of the story, here is the next part.
*Meanwhile…*

“****!” Ringobingo says. (As you can tell, he swears.) “****ing h***!” (A lot…:() “Where the **** am I?!?”

Suddenly there is a rustle in the bushes. Ringobingo readies his gun. “Whoa! Hold it man! I am a friend!” A strange scaled creature walked out of the bushes, holding a basket with all sorts of fruits in it. “No need to swear, friend. You are currently in the Forest of Blah. It is also known as the Blah Place.” Putting the basket on the ground, the creature walked closer to Ringobingo.

Ringobingo backed away a few steps, and aimed the gun straight at the creature’s head. “Who are you, creature?” Ringobingo asked in a harsh tone.

“Name’s Camoudile. But most people call me Cam.” He stood up onto his hind legs, and held out a clawed paw. Ringobingo just followed Camoudile’s head with his gun. Disappointed by the lack of a hand/paw shake, Camoudile fell back onto all fours. “So, what’s your name?”

In an angry tone, Ringobingo growled, “Ringobingo is my name. And you look like a fitting meal.”

“Yikes! Dangerous and hungry. Not a good combo. MYSTRESS!!! HELP!!!” (I wrote this part in to show not that Cam can't defend himself, but that Ringobingo has overpowered him.)

“One moment!” a voice yelled from the bushes a few yards away. During this time, Ringobingo fired his gun at Cam, and realized that he was out of bullets. Taking all of this in stride, he swung the gun like a club, and struck Cam on the side of the head, knocking him out, and causing him to start bleeding. Suddenly, out of the bushes, a woman dressed in a tye-dye shirt, with her hair rolled into a bun, fingerless gloves, and a pair of blue jeans. In her right hand, she is holding a basket full of Blah berries, and in her left, she is holding a wicked-looking hammer/pencil/ mace thing with weird/wicked symbols on one side, and on the other side, is the name of Mystress Jokehammer. She looks at Ringobingo, then at the twitching body of Camoudile (he is still alive by the way… I didn’t kill him), then back at Ringobingo. Ringobingo laughed, manically, seeing the look on the woman’s face.

“Allatwan! M13! Need a bit of back up here!” the woman yelled. Ringobingo laughed and said in a harsh voice to the woman,

“Looks like your f***ing friends aren't comin'. Looks like I will have myself a—“ Suddenly the ground started shaking, and the sounds of trees breaking reached Ringobingo’s ears. “S***! Mechwarriors! F***! I need to F***ing leave now! OUTTA ME F***ING, A** WAY MON!” The woman looked impressed at how many swear words the troll could fit into one sentence.

Suddenly, two Atlas ‘Mechs ran out of the brush. The skins on these ‘Mechs were a light-blue (sky blue) color, with badge stripes along the sides and fronts of the ‘Mechs. The Mechwarriors (the drivers of the ‘Mechs), said through their intercoms, “Allatwan and M13 here. What’s up Mystress?” Then they caught sight of the unconscious Cam, and the p***ed Ringobingo. The ‘Mechs turned their weapons toward Ringobingo, and fired. Ringobingo tried to jump out of the way, but was hit by one of the “MYSTcommunity lasers”. He crumpled to the ground, just as I popped into existence in front of them all.

Sweet! Nice job you two!

They bowed, and said “Thanks Author. Mind telling us who this person is?”

He goes by the name of Ringobingo the Headhunter. He is a very homicidal troll, and can blow up even with the smallest spark. Please be careful with him.

They nodded, then looked back at the bodies of Ringobingo and Cam. “What should we do—“ They looked back at me, but I had disappeared.


Very sorry Camoudile. I won't hurt anyone else until later, when I am writing the endings. (Yes, I said endings. I want it to have 3 bad endings and one good one. PM me if you want to know the endings ahead of time.)

The laws of physics are broken... Umm... Anyone have some duck tape? :)

Also, Mystress, I hope you like the mace thing... got the idea from the MC comics. Made the name of "Jokehammer" up myself. Decided to put the names "Joker" and "Hammer" together and this is what resulted.

May the Grower guide you.

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Posted 03 May 2011 - 11:40 AM

Here is another small clip from the MC story:

(Lunash is getting his first look of the MYSTcommunity capitol)

"The three Mechwarriors slowed to a walk (about 3km per hour), as theyreached the edge of the Forrest of Blah, on the city side. They broke through the tree cover, and Lunashgot his first glimpse of the MC Capitol.



The city is a multi-tiered city with a moving life-like statue of a goldenman on the top-most building. The firsttier (bottom) is the Guest (white) tier. This tier is for traders, wandering explorers, those Members whom aren't logged in, or anyone else who is just visiting the city. The second tier is the Member (blue)tier. It is the tier for those whomdecided to join the community, because of family, friends, or justbecause. The third tier is the TeamMember (green) tier. It is the tier forthose whom were in the Community for long enough, show helpful leader skills,like the color green (kidding); show that they are willing to help the lowerranking members of the community, and other things. (These other things depend on you guys.) The fourth (red) tier is the Admin tier. It is the tier for those whom have been inthe Community for a (very) long time, who show fantastic leadership abilities, andother things. (My mind went blank whileI was trying to think of the things that would allow one to become an admin inMC. Again, these other things depend onyou guys.)The last tier is the Leader (blue, red, green) tier. This tier is for those whom the leader of MC deemsworthy for access to the main building in which the leader takesresidence. This tier is the nerve centerof the entire world. If this tier istaken out, (destroyed or whatever (just listing possible ways it could be takenout. Not trying to get myself bootedagain. If anyone takes offense to this,please let me know.)), the entire world will go into chaos, as all of the waterwill stop flowing, the power will go down, and the world will stopspinning. (This tier does control theworld’s rotation. So if this tier is putout of commission for a while, whatever time of day it was when the tier wastaken out, will be the time of day for however long it takes until the tier isrestored.)

Now think of the power lines in Spire that connects to the Spiderchair. Multiply the number of powerlines in Spire by about one hundred, make the tubes the size and thickness of aman-hole cover and connect the top tier to all of those power lines. Then take the ends of the lines that aren’t connectedto the tier, run them out over the city, and drive them into the ground,spreading out in all directions. Thesepower lines are those lines that hold the water, power, waste, and everythingelse that helps the world in them."




I am still working on the story, adding more and more detail, trying to work in everyone. Hope you enjoy it!

-Lunash Blackmoon


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